Tuesday, November 13, 2007
The reason why i decided to share my experience with be independent is because of my own personal experiences. The most famous one was needing rides to work not because i needed one but just being lazy. But it didn't get me anywhere but not going or late every time.The next experience that really made me mad was club night everybody trying to find a ride to the club. The problem was trying to make before a certain time to get in free but never made it.So the most valuable lesson i learn is. Catch the bus or have a plan a b or even c, as far as work never depend on anybody when money is on the line.
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Jamisha,
Good follow through, you really increased the specific examples quite a bit. Another area to polish up is grammar/word choice. When write "with be independent" I think you mean "with being independent." However, that won't fly on the actual GED test. The scorers would mark you down for lack of control of language, even though it's probably just a small proofreading oversight. There are a few other similar problematic spots in the paragraph. Find them and change them this evening at the start of class.
Keep pushin'!
Adam
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