Tuesday, December 11, 2007

Writing: Answer this question that we created as a class-
What would you do to improve Richmond? Why? How? Use your own knowledge, observations and personal experiences to support your answer. Give specific details


What would I do to improve Richmond

The first thing I would do is improve the employment opportunities. That's what I think is the biggest problem. Its not just that its the pay how do they expect people to live on that kind of money.I remember when I first had my child I did have the privilege of coming from a wealthy family or have the support of a child's father. So just like most young girls my age I had to be on welfare for a moment. They say they are designed to help single mothers but that's sould I say bullshit. I remember I was in one of there so called job readiness classes and the lady was talking about they would pay for childcare while you work so I said that's fine but what if you didnt want to work.Would they support you if you wanted to go to school because that's what I was interested in. She said NO! I looked at her like she was crazy and was like that's crazy that doesn't make since. They would rather you work at McDonald's then to support you in a way that you could so support yourself for a lifetime.Then they have the nerve to have a five year maximum time you could be on welfare get real how much can u gain at McDonald's in five years maybe a dollar or two raise wow!
That's what crazy if i had allot of money where I would donate to a fund it would help young mothers for real because i don't think people know how hard it really is to be a single mother its not about your wants its abouts your child's needs. That's the way I see it maybe everybody don't think like that but me being the mother that I am I take that serious its hard am not saying is easy you have to put yourself completely to the side like now am just getting to a point in my life where i can start my life. I wanted to start years but with no support that's what I had to do set my wants aside for my child's needs. But that's OK better late than not at all! and that what chapter am at now in my life.

1 comment:

Adam Nathanson said...

Jamisha,
The best part of your essay is where you say exactly what you'd do to improve things here. Remember, that's what the prompt asks for. Revise your essay by doing the following:

1. Expand on and emphasize the idea of starting a fund for young mothers.
2. Connect the improvements from the fund you'd start to the problems currently existing. An example would be providing the money for girls to continue their educations instead of slaving away at dead-end jobs.

See you tonight,
Adam