Thursday, December 13, 2007

The way I would help single mothers is to start a program that would help them advance there education. They would have childcare, transportation and other benifits from da program. First the program would have an social worker assined to every mother to find out what where there personal goel or help them find one. It would be A step by step program, first they would have the choice of a ged or high school education. The next step would be to find what career goel the would be most confortable with . To help with that they would have a week of training in the area of there choice. This would help with decision hands on experiances that would help with any douts they would have with the choices they have made. Then they would have hands on help with funds thet would help them complete there goel or career. After the would complete collage or job training.The last step would be to help them find a job that start there life as Carrer Women!

2 comments:

Adam Nathanson said...

Jamisha,
Please excuse my delayed response. Your essay looks pretty good! I see an introduction, supporting details, and a brief but passable conclusion. Ultimately this essay answers the original question "How would you improve Richmond?" The main weak spots you still have are grammar and spelling. This is where proofreading comes in handy, and could even make or break a passing GED essay in your case. Examples to watch out for are: benifits, da program, assined, goel, confortable, there, experiances, douts, collage, Carrer. Overall solid progress. See you in class!
Best,
Adam

Adam Nathanson said...

Jamisha,
Please excuse my delayed response. Your essay looks pretty good! I see an introduction, supporting details, and a brief but passable conclusion. Ultimately this essay answers the original question "How would you improve Richmond?" The main weak spots you still have are grammar and spelling. This is where proofreading comes in handy, and could even make or break a passing GED essay in your case. Examples to watch out for are: benifits, da program, assined, goel, confortable, there, experiances, douts, collage, Carrer. Overall solid progress. See you in class!
Best,
Adam